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I JUST WANT YOU TO ALL KNOW THAT THIS WAS MY FIRST STORY EVER WRITTEN. I WROTE THIS STORY ON THE CHRISBROWN BOARD AND I GOT A LOT OF GOOD RESPONSES....I HAVE WRITTEN A TOTAL OF 6 STORIES...THIS IS MY FIRST SO IF YALL LIKE IT I WILL POST MY NEXT STORY AFTER THIS ONE IS FINISHED...OH AND SINCE I SAID IT WAS ON THE CHRIS BROWN BOARD I CHANGED THE NAMES SO IT WILL BE IN THE FORM OF B2K CHARACTERS...ARITE ENJOY YALL!

Part 1

You sit on your bed with your Pajamas on, thinking about tomorrow, when your thoughts are interrupted by your step mom.

Monica- (opens your door) y/n…I think its time for you to go sleep now…tomorrow is your first day and you shouldn’t start by being late to class

You don’t look at her, and continue to stay in the same position.

Monica- (shakes her head) do you want m… You- (turn your head) I heard you

Monica- (she sighs) good night (she walks out, closing the door behind her)

You get up to go wash your teeth, and as you were about to begin, you phone rings.

You- (walk over and pick it up) hello

Christine- hey!

You- (laugh) I guess you’re excited…if you go to sleep, then tomorrow will come faster

Christine- shut up…can you believe it…we’re seniors!

You- (sigh) I know…I guess I will miss high school

Christine- more like Dru

You- (sit on the bed) you think I should happy to see him…but he doesn’t really talk to me (shake your head) I’m an idiot, I don’t even know why I like that boy, I barely know him

Christine- y/n, that’s normal (she laughs) I never thought you’ll like anyone, especially so much

You- me neither…I was always the one who listened to everyone problems about relationships…the one who had it all together…well not my life cause you know about that, but now this drama

Christine- well, how you expect him to approach you when he don’t even know you like him

You- and its going to stay like that…Christine, first I’m not one to tell people my problems, and second, he’s been with Niki forever (shake your head) this whole thing is worthless

Christine- (laughs) don’t be so hard on yourself, hey but I’ll see you tomorrow because I still need to find out what I’m going to wear (sighs) what you wearing?

You- (shrug) I don’t know…I went shopping, so I’ll just something new

Christine- ok, well good night girl You- you too (you hang up)

You go wash your teeth and get ready for bed. While still in the bathroom, the phone rings.

You- (outloud) what, what! (you pick up the phone) what

Mom- well hi to you too

You- oh…hey mom

Mom- what you doing?

You- uh…trying to sleep

Mom- (ignoring your comment) so, how are things going, you doing good?

You- (annoyed) God why you always got to start with that…oh yea I’m 5 months preganant, today I blazed all afternoon, and I shot 3 people

Mom- (frustrated) y/n…stop acting like that…I’m just worried

You- well, stop…look I need to sleep ok

Mom- have a good day tomorrow sweety

You- (calming down) yea

Mom- I love you

You- (hesitant) … me too (you hang up)

You shake your head and get into sleep. While growing up, you always stood out for your potential to succeed and your sincerity. Your parents raised you in an environment with strong morals. Everything seemed to be going great, until out of no where your parents divorced. Feeling betrayed and confused, you were influenced by pure negativity, thinking it was a way to get back at them for what they put you through. You hanged out with the wrong crowd, and went against your morals by engaging with drugs and alcohol. Luckily, you didn’t become addicted, only because you were sent to California (San Francisco) to live with your father and his not so pleasant new wife. It’s been three years, and you’re a senior at Jefferson High. You work really hard in school, which is why you earn good grades, not for anyone, but yourself. You’ve managed to leave you old life behind, but the resentment towards your parents haunt you from time to time. At school, you’re a normal student. You are well-known, since you mingle with different crowds, and try to be involve, anything to keep you busy and away from your problems. You have your set group of friends, who mean a lot to you. At school, you are known for your friendliness. You devote yourself to not only your friends, but just simply anyone who may be in the need for someone to talk too or anything. Now, you’ve had a crush, that has evolved into a stronger feeling for a guy at your school named Dru. This doesn’t help much, for it only brings more frustration to you. But, just like always, you dream that maybe this year, that changes.


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Part 2

The Next Day

You rush out your room and into the kitchen you grab a bite to eat.

Dad- (hands you a muffin) here

You- (take it) thanks

Dad- (looks at his watch) you’re going to be late

You- (finish washing down the glass of orange juice) ~breathe~ yea (you set the glass down and run out)

Dad- (shouts) good luck!

You- (hurry back and wave, then rush over to your corolla)

After circling the parking lot for about 10 minutes, you finally find parking.

You- (out loud, inside the car) damn it, I always have to be late (a black Altima with tinted windows parks next to you) ~shrug~ well, at least I’m not the only one

You get out of the car and throw your backpack over your shoulder, then set the car alarm. The car door to the Altima opens and you see Dru get out. Your jaw drops, and at the same time so does your purse. You bend down to pick up all the things that fell out, hitting your head hard against the side mirror of your car.

You- (kneeling) ~hold you head~ ****!

Your POV~ Oh how embarrassing! Woo way to go y/n. Ouch, there goes a huge bump on my head now. I hope he didn’t see, he’s walking, wait, why don’t I hear his footsteps anymore…oh no, he’s behind me…Jesus, he’s behind me. Dang y/n, calm down.

Dru- are you coo?

You- (thinking: he’s talking to me? He’s talking to me!) ~you quickly get up and face him~ (smile) yea…just that I was rushing, trying not to be late, but so much for that (breathe out, realizing you were talking fast)

Dru- (laughs) yea…well, are you going to class? (points)

You- (feeling dumb) yea

You begin walking and soon get next to him.

Your POV~ This is crazy! What the hell, I’m walking next to the guy of my dreams (excited) He got a haircut, but he still looks so good!

Dru- right?

You- (coming back from your dazed) huh?

Dru- (smiles) did you just wake up?

You- oh…sorry just that I have all these things to do

Dru- it’s coo…I was just saying if your y/n

You- (nod) [thinking: oh hell nah] yea…and well you’re Dru

Dru- why you say it like that?

You- oh…I mean your everywhere, the football player, the basketball star, should I continue?

Dru- (laughs) nah…(looks at your muffin) are you going to eat that?

You- (look at him and raise your eyebrow) you could just ask to have some (you cut it in half)

Dru- (smiles) thanks (he takes a big bite into it)

Your POV~ Beautiful! I can’t believe I’m talking to him, and with no Nikki around.
(Just then you see Nikki coming from the other side of the parking lot) Why did I say that?

You- (before he said anything) ok well bye (without waiting for his response you walk off)

Before walking into the school, you look back and see Dru caressing Nikki’s cheek and kiss her lips. You look down in disappointed for a few seconds, then walk in.

After School

You just finished getting dressed in the locker room and wait for your good friend Amber to finish.

Amber- (putting her hair up) damn it’s the first day of school and we already got practice…I should kick yo ass since you co-captain

You- (stand up) yea but I didn’t call this meeting…girl please

You both walk outside, revealing the large football field and track.

You- (smile) ~gangster attitude~ what up dog?

O- (laughs) hey baby girl, come give me a hug (you go jump on him) (Omari)

You- (give dap to the guys standing next to him) sup pimp

Jay- nothing…you looking good

You- (pretending to model) you know how I do (you laugh)

Amber- (hugging O) what time you get out of practice?

O- (wraps his arms around him) I don’t know…maybe around 7pm

Amber- oh…well I’ll probably be done by then, so you can come over after

O- (smiles) aright

You- (look at them) ya’ll so cute

Amber- (shakes her head) you dumb girl

You see the rest of the girls on the dance team head towards the dance room.

You- we got to go now and get our dance on (do a little dance)

Jay- oh how was that (tries to imitate you)

O- (laughing) ~he starts doing it~

You- (to Amber) I’m not the dumb one (point to Jay and O)

Amber- (nods) word

You look at her and laugh. The door from the locker room is swung open and the cheerleaders walk out. Nikki, who was the captain of the cheerleading squad, waves at O and Jay, who also greet her.

You- (ruining your mood) come on Amber (you pull her arm and walk away) I don’t want to know

Amber- (looking back at Nikki hugging Dru) what…they not doing nothing

Ya’ll walk into the dance room. You all sit on the bleachers as your dance teacher speaks.

Ms. Via- (loudly) welcome…I’m glad to see you all are here…I know you all probably think its crazy that we’re practicing already, but we have a week until the welcome back assembly, and well they’ve asked us to be one of the main performers

The girls begin to talk amongst them, some are nervous, others excited.

Ms. Via- so basically we’re going to perfect part of the routine we’ve already learned and go on to the next part (looks around) ok well everyone up, let’s do this

Ya’ll get up and stretch.

Ms. Via- y/n and Kalisha (I’m going to use “K,” but I’m actually meaning the whole name) can you come with me?

You both get up and walk to the other side of the room.

Ms. Via- I want to run through the whole routine really quick, and then ya’ll can teach the girls

You both agree and walk outside, where you see all the football players and cheerleaders.

Ms. Via- (looks at both of you) ready?

You both nod as she walks to the radio and lets the music run. (The music was a mix of hip-hop, from new school to old school, also just some hot beats (dance), a little bit of everything).

K- (whispers) look…all eyes on us (you look at her) ~she smiles~ I love it

You laugh and get into position. Bam! The music starts are you both erupt with elaborated choreography. Mixing in complex dance moves, to sexy maneuvering, dropping to floor, jumping up, it was hot!

Jay- (dancing to the beat) oh what! Go, go!

You begin walking his way, while still dancing and seductively look at him while performing some of the steps.

J- damn, how the hell they do that (Jarell)

Nikki- (looks at both of you) yea…they real good…we have a really good dance team this year

Finally, the routine ends.

Ms. Via- (clapping) that is what I’m talking about!

K- (while getting up) woo I dun got bruises all over now

You- (get up laughing) me too (you rub your knee)

You wave at Jay and O before walking back into the dance room. You see Dru standing next to Nikki, and for what seemed a split second, your eyes meet, but of course he soon focuses on Nikki. Practice lasted really long, more than it was expected too. By the time ya’ll finished, the girls had learned the whole routine, but work was still needed for all of them to be intact and get the moves down.

K- (walking slowly) I’ll call you later so we could talk about the positions…hell I don’t know how I’m going to be able to walk tomorrow

You- (laugh) girl for real…I can barely walk (she smiles as walks away)

Amber- (tiredly walks up to you) and I thought I was going to be done before the football players

You- (laugh) oh…by the way, girl you got the routine down real good

Amber- thanks (cocky) you know me

You both laugh then part in separate ways. You begin walking towards the parking lot, your legs feeling like they were literally going to collapse. You see that Dru’s car is still parked next to yours, but you don’t see him anywhere by. You hear voices and turn to the side, where you see Nikki and Dru walking together, hand in hand.

Nikki- (loudly) hey (you look at her) you were really good…I really like that routine

You- (surprised) oh…thanks (you smile) ~you look at Dru who has his arms wrapped around her~

Dru- (looks at you) yea, good job

Nikki laughs and turns her face, giving him a kiss. Feeling uncomfortable, you quickly go to your car. You get in and drive away, not looking back.

Your POV~ So much for getting excited this morning…over nothing. [/b]


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Part 3

The assembly went really good. All that practicing paid off because the dance team performed great. As for you, since it was your senior year, there were a lot of pressures, which is why only a month into school, you were already stressed. A normal day for you was to go to school, practice after, get home and eat dinner, do your homework, and stay in your room for the rest of the time, since Monica was there, and you didn't want to interact with her much. It's a Saturday evening and you're in your room listening to music. Your cell phone rings.

You- (answer it) what's up

Christine- hey…what you doing?

You- just got out the shower, you?

Christine- I'm getting for the party you don't want to go too

You- (laugh)

Christine- (loud) oh…guess what!!!

You- what?

Christine- Nikki and Dru broke up!

You- (shocked) ~you swallow~ stop playing Christine

Christine- I swear, I saw them yesterday, well not them together, at the party you left early…they broke up before the game, that's why I guess he sucked so bad, but at the party they were arguing, and later on she was hanging out with her friends and he was on the other side…but he left like 5 minutes later

You- (excited) so they broke up? …this is great (realize what you said) I mean, wait how sad I shouldn't be happy…anyways I know Dru still in love with that girl

Christine- girl stop thinking like that…hold up (she hands the phone to Amber)

Amber- y/n you really need to come to this party, he's going to be there

You- dang where you come from?

Amber- (laughs) K and I are getting ready here…come on girl, I know you're tired and you messed up your ankle, but that was on Thursday, you didn't do nothing yesterday so it should be healed

You- Amber that poor guy is not going to be there, he' probably heart-broken

Amber- O told me he was going, he is going with Jay and Rell

You- ok…I'll go, but not for him, and if its whack, I'm coming home

Amber- (laughs) ok You- aright, I'll be there in like 30 minutes

You hang up and get ready. When you finish getting ready, you get your purse and keys and go to the living room.

You- dad (he looks at you) can I go out with my friends?

Dad- where you going?

You- to a party, it's close by, and I have my cell on

Dad- what kind of party?

You- (shrug) a party

Dad- (nods) fine, and be home by 1

You- (nod) thanks (you quickly walk out and go in your car)

You decide to drive, so ya'll finally get to the party. There was a lot of people everywhere, a lot of drunk and high people. As you walk through the crowd you see a girl fall to the floor, barely able to keep her eyes open. Another girl picks her up and helps her walk. You continue to stare, remembering yourself. Your thoughts are interrupted by K.

K- come on y/n (you follow her)

With the Boys

Jay- so then ya broke up for no reason

Dru- (looks at him) things weren't working out…she said I was too jealous and that we needed time apart

Jay- I got that, look at her dancing with that guy

O- (hits him) ~he shakes his head~ (clears his throat) well Dru don't even trip, you know you can easily get with someone else

Dru- (looks at o) like who?

O- lots of girls

Dru- none of them compare to Nikki

Jay- you need to move on, look at her

Dru- I don't get why I got to get with someone else, I'm going to be with her and not like her…and I don't even have anyone in mind

Jay- well I know someone who is really sprung on you

O- (hits him again) damn ni66a you need to really shut up

Dru- (stands up straight) who?

O- no one

Dru- who Jay?

Jay- (points)

Dru- y/n?

Jay- yea...she's like you for a long ass time

O- (shakes his head) damn Jay how you going to put her on blast like that

Dru- so she'll do anything?

Jay- (smiles) ****, if you were to ask her to get with you right now she'll probably say yes

Dru- (laughs)

O- (serious) yo Dru forget bout y/n, she real coo and she don't need to get hurt

Dru- why you tripping…its not like I'm going to do something wrong, but if Nikki don't dancing like that with that foo, then I guess I'll go holla at y/n (he smiles)

Back With You

You- why they keep staring?

Christine- (shrugs) they probably not even purposely looking here

Amber- well, lets go over there, talk to O and Jay

You- I have to use the restroom

K- I'll go with you You both walk away

K- will you get with Dru?

You- (confused) what? (you stop) girl, I don't even talk to him, how the hell is that going to happen?

K- (shrugs) I was just wondering

You- oh…(thinking) …I mean I really do like him, but why will I get with him if he don't know me, so how can he like me

K- (nods) well, y/n whatever happens, just don't listen so much to your heart and use your brain a little, I don't want anything bad to happen

You- (confused) ~you just nod~

Dru is inside, looking at you as you wait in line to use the bathroom.

Dru's POV~ They all think it's so damn easy just to stop loving someone. I really love Nikki, but I can believe she just doesn't give a f/ck and is already trying to get with someone else. Maybe getting with someone else will help me get over her faster. (looks at you) Y/n is pretty…I'm going to have to get to know her better, but if what Jay said is true, it should not be a problem getting with her. I guess being with her, who I don't like, is better than to hurt from not being with Nikki, at least she'll keep me busy. (He begins walking your way)


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SO WHAT DO YALL THINK SO FAR?!?

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BUMP BUMP BUMP!!! THiS'Z iS'Z GOOD K33P GOiNG!!

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Part 4

Your cell phone rings, and you see its your dad.

You- (to K) I’ll be right back (you walk away from the restroom line and go outside the front house) hello

Dad- its dad…I need you to get home earlier because I have a meeting early tomorrow

Dru walks out and looks at you. You meet his eyes.

Dad- hello!

You- (walk farther away from Dru) yea…uh what time you want me home then?

Dad- 12

You- (notice he is still looking) but its almost 12

Dad- well then you’ll be here soon

You- (annoyed) bye (you hang up) ~you shake your head and turn around to start walking back, but you bump into someone~ (you look up and see Dru) oh sorry

Dru- (smiles) nah, it was my bad

You- (smile)

Dru- so you leaving?

You- not yet

Dru- (smiles) good

You begin to talk to him, just have a normal conversation. You let the girls know that you have to leave earlier, but they decide to stay. You really enjoyed talking to Dru, you found to be a real nice guy, and you both had a lot of things in common.

You- (get up) well, I have to go now, but it was nice talking to you

Dru- why you leaving so early?

You- I have things to do tomorrow

Dru- (nods) oh…do you need a ride?

You- (shake your head) no thanks, I drove here

Dru- I’ll walk you

You both walk down the street to your car.

You- (stop) thanks for walking me (you smile)

Dru- (staring at you) no problem…do you think I can get your number?

You- (feeling butterflies) uh…sure (he stores your cell number in his cell) ok well have a good night

You turn to open the door, but Dru gently pulls you around. He pulls you closer to him by your waist and leans in giving you a sweet peck on the lips. As you feel his tongue against yours, your body weakens. The kiss becomes more passionate and intense. Although, you knew you shouldn’t be doing this, you really like him a lot, making that feeling for him hard to control. You manage to gain composure.

You- (pull away) ~you step back~ I shouldn’t be doing this

Dru- (nods and caresses your lip) sorry

You- (not believing this was really happening) ~you smile and get inside~ (you roll down your window) bye

Dru- I’ll call you

You wave and drive away.

Dru- (out loud) F/ck, what the hell am I doing (shakes his head)

He begins heading back to the party.

Jay- (smiles) damn you quick, I told you

Dru- (looks at him) man, I shouldn’t have done that, I don’t like y/n, she’s a really nice girl and doesn’t deserve for me to make her believe something that is not going to happen, but now she probably thinks I like her…I ain’t going to front, I love Nikki and I want her bad, I don’t give a damn about anyone else but her (looks to the side) tell the boys I’m out (he walks away)

Jay- (confused) wait

Dru- (stops) what

Jay- but how do you know you won’t be able to like y/n, I mean you just said it, she’s a great girl, I mean who wouldn’t fall for her

Dru- me…you obviously don’t know **** about love (he quickly leaves)

Dru doesn’t call you that night.

Sunday Night

[Ring, ring, ring, ring]

Nikki- hello

Dru- (croaky voice) Nikki, its me

Nikki- (changing her tone of voice) oh, hey Dru

Dru- Nikki, I can’t be without you, look I’m sorry for anything wrong that I did and I promise I’ll change, I need you with me because I still love you

Nikki- (interrupts) Dru, I care for you a lot too and you do mean a lot to me, but I’m just really confused, I mean most of the time we’re arguing about the stupidest things…you never trust me and you always get jealous for everything…I feel so controlled, so tied now, it doesn’t seem like a relationship and right now I just need time alone

Dru- you mean time with that guy you were with on Saturday

Nikki- (annoyed) see, there you go…at least Brian isn’t so damn controlling like you…I have to go now Dru, and it’ll be better if you don’t call me (she hangs up)

He doesn’t go to school the next day, which only made you more confused. You were upset at the fact you kissed him, that he didn’t call you, the whole situation. The day went by really slow, and you were in a bad mood most of the time. The next day you wake up feeling sick, but you had a quiz for second period, so you were only going to go for that then leave.

Nutrition (after your 2nd period class)

You- aright well I’m gone, I feel like crap

Amber- you coming to practice?

You- (shrug) if I wake up

Christine- hope you feel better

You- (smile) thanks

K- I’ll you later

You smile and walk away. You head out that building and begin making your way across campus to the parking lot. As you’re walking, you hear your name being called.

Dru- (shouts) y/n

You stop and turn around. You see him, but instead feel mad.

Dru- (catches up to you) I heard you were sick (gently gets your chin, but you jerk back)

You- (serious) yea, I’m going home so I’ll see you

Dru- (slowly takes your arm) wait…baby what’s wrong?

You- (attitude) I ain’t your baby (pull your arm away) and I’m sick, that’s what’s wrong

Dru- (surprised by your attitude) sorry, just that, I don’t know, I guess I’m beginning to feel something for you

You- (laugh) Dru, sorry babe, but I’m not stupid, now I know what you’re trying to do and it’s not going to work, so go look somewhere else (you walk away)

Dru- (walks next to you) y/n, I’m not trying to do anything but get to know you better…I really think you are a great girl, and I want to spend more time with you

You- (just look at him)

Dru- I really don’t know what you’re talking about

You- (confused) I have to go ok

Dru- can I get a hug?

You- (look at him) ~you give him a quick hug then leave~ Dru walks back to the school and goes inside a building.

Dru- ay Jay, do you have y/n’s address?

Jay- yea, you want it?

Dru- (nods)

Jay- what she say?

Dru- (shrug) she catching an attitude, I hope I ain’t got to deal with that

Jay doesn’t say anything and gives him the address.

Jay- (before leaving) look, I told you about y/n cause I know she likes you and well I know she will want to get with you, now I hope that you will treat her good, if you actually want something with her, and if you still stuck on what you told me Saturday, then I suggest you drop this (he walks away)


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Part 5

You get home and go straight to your bed, falling into a deep sleep. Hours later, you are woken up by the constant ring of the doorbell. You slowly get up and walk to the door.

You- (open it) what are you doing here?

K- damn, well hi to you too (she walks in)

You- (shut the door) no I didn’t mean it like that, just that, well aren’t you suppose to be at practice

K- girl (points to the clock) its 7:30 (pm) practice is over

You- (your eyes widened) dang, I knocked out

K- I see that…so how you feeling?

You- (nod) I’m good now…guess who talked to me today?

K- (confused) who?

You- dru (her eyes widened) yea…he was trying to caress my face and he called me baby

K- what!

You- (nod) but I told him I wasn’t his baby and that I’m not falling for his stupid game

K- (gives you dap) that’s right

You- (flop down on the couch) but damn it I like him so much, I just wanted him to ask me to be with him…I don’t know how the hell I gave him attitude

K- well, I’m you did, I mean I don’t know him, or know what he trying to do, but you protecting yourself

You- yea I guess…(look at her) but this is so weird, to think that I will dream for him to just talk to me…and now, he calling me baby…this is what I prayed for (she looks at you in surprised) yes I know you thought it was just this little crush and that I never wanted a boyfriend, but girl I’m a girl too…and Dru is always on my mind

K- wow…I didn’t know you liked him like that

You- (sigh) I do…do you think I’ll be wrong in not giving him a chance?

K- I’m usually the ones always asking you questions, you got me in the spotlight

You- what if he actually does want to get with me for me…(frustrated) that’s why I’m always keeping myself away from this ****, it brings so much drama, and I’m scared

K- (looks at you) why you scared?

You- (look at her) because I’m y/n, in everyone’s eyes (thinking: at least with you guys) I’m the strong one, the one who can do anything, and all these expectations…I know I’m not suppose to live my life trying to meet other’s expectations on me, but what if I fail to live up to them…my own

K- y/n, you know how to tell right from wrong…you truly are one of a kind, and I know you always saying not to say that because something to do with your pass, although you never tell me (shrugs) but, honestly don’t be so hard on every step you take because you’re not going to fully experience life…but I guess the best advice I could give you is not be blinded by things…or even love

You- (look at her and smile) thanks girl (you hug her) you definitely know how to cheer someone up

K- (laughs) ~gets up~ ok, well I need to go do my paper…call me later (she hugs you goodbye and leaves)

You walk outside and watch her drive away. You quickly glance in the direction of your car, and some white papers grabbed your attention. You walk up to the back of your car, and there were 4 pieces of small papers. You turn one over and it says “Hey”. You turn them all over and it spelled out “Hey I’m sorry, Dru” You look around, confused but also surprised. You take the papers and turn around.

You- (jump) ~gasp~

Dru- (smiles) I didn’t mean to scare you

You- (feeling awkward) ~you look at the rose he is holding~ its ok

Dru- (hands you the rose) this is for you

You- (confused) ~take it~ thanks

Dru- can we talk?

You- (look to the side) ~you look at him~ yea (you both head inside your house and go sit on the couch)

Dru- I know what you’re thinking, you probably think I’m trying to get with you to forget about Nikki and that I really don’t like you

You- (put the paper cards and rose down) it’s not that I think Dru, I know…now you just lying to yourself to say you’re not trying to do that…honestly, I would have liked to get to know you, but not right now, I know you need time, time to really think what you want, and I’m doing this not because I’m trying to be a *****, but because I don’t want to get hurt

Dru- (not knowing what to say) ~he stays quiet for a while, looking down~ (he gets up)

You- (get up) I’m s…

Dru- (looks at you) you don’t need to say anything…I’m getting used to being pushed away (smiles) sorry to bother you (he passes by you and quickly walks away)

You look at he shuts the door behind him, not sure if you had done the right thing.

With Dru

Dru- (driving, he is on his cell) yea I know man…this is not even me

O- I’m glad you realized that

Dru- I just feel stupid you know…the whole thing with y/n, what the hell was I thinking, and then when I called Nikki…I just need to get my act together

O- its not easy, but you strong and you’ll be fine

Dru- yea, you right (pulls into the gas station) I’ll got to go

O- aright man, see you tomorrow

Dru- peace (he hangs up)

He drives his car to a gas pump and parks it. He looks through his rear view mirror and sees Brian hugging Nikki, and then kisses her. He stares, hurting inside, feeling his heart deteriorate. He quickly turns on the car and drives away. Back with you You go back to your room and your cell phone rings. You get it, not recognizing the number and answer it.

You- hello

Voice- (lowly) y/n…its Dru, do you think I could talk to you?

You- (concerned) uh yea…sure, where are you?

Dru- outside your house?

You- you want to come in?

Dru- ok (he hangs up)

You walk to the front door and let Dru in. You both go into your room.

You- (look at him) you okay?

Dru- (shakes his head) ~has his head down~

You- (get closer to him)

He wraps his arms around you and hugs you tight. You, in shock, not knowing what the hell was going on, hug him back.

You- what’s wrong?

Dru- (separates) ~he takes off his hood and rubs his eyes, then looks up~ f/ck, I’m sorry, I just didn’t know who to talk too

You- (feeling bad) ~shake your head~ oh, no its fine

Dru- (looks down) ~his eyes are red, and you see the left over of a tear right under his eye~ I just thought I could get over Nikki…(shakes his head) I just saw her with another guy and…(looks to the side) ~shake his head, unable to speak~

You- (thinking: Oh My God! I never thought I’ll actually see this, and especially not Dru!) Dru, I’m sorry (gently rub his tear away) but please don’t be like this…I feel so bad, I don’t like to see people hurt, specially not you

Dru- (looks at you and takes your hand) ~shakily~ thanks…you really are a great person…I mean I don’t even know you, and I’m here, crying (shakes his head) ~faintly smiles~ you probably think I’m a little *****

You- I don’t…that’s why I’m so scared to fall in love, and I really wish I could do something to make you feel better

Dru- (interrupts) you did…by listening to me, that means a lot to me (looks down) I’m such an idiot, I can’t believe I was, what I did to you

You- love is blind, sometimes driving you to do stupid things

Dru- (looks at you and nods) ~clears his throat~ I’m going to get going…(smiles) thank you…and any guy who has you as his girlfriend will really be lucky

You- (smile)

Dru- bye You- take care…and if you ever need someone to talk too…don’t hesitate

Dru- (nods) ~he leaves~

Your POV~ Oh my God! Was this a crazy ass day or what? First I have this foo trying to get me with him, then he over here crying cause of his ex. And I never thought I would see a guy cry! Well, at least not for that reason, I thought that was all in the movies. My heart was sinking just by looking at him. (shake your head) Maybe if I go back to sleep, when I wake up, my life will be back to the normal, boring self.


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Part 6

You sit up and gasp. You quickly look around your dark room.

You- (hold up the clock on the night table next to your bed) 2:45am You quickly get your cell and call Christine.

Christine- (sleepy) h…hello

You- (whisper loudly) Christine!

Christine- (waking up) y/n…girl what the hell are you thinking calling me right now

You- did we start school already?

Christine- (confused) is this a joke, cause I don’t think its funny

You- no, I’m serious!

Christine- y/n, are you on something, I talk to you a few hours ago and you told me I was too excited to start school, but I think that’s you…its almost 3 in the morning and you calling me just hours before the first day of our senior year starts

You- (breathe out in relieve) it was just a dream

Christine- what?

You- (remembering you were on the phone with her) girl, I had the weirdest dream, but everything seem so real…that’s why I called you, I didn’t even know what the hell was going on in reality

Christine- (yawns) well I’ll love to hear about your dream, but tomorrow cause you just interrupted my sleep, now I’m going to be all moody…in like 3 hours

You- (giggle) sorry, see you soon (you hang up)

You shake your head.

You- (out loud) I need to stop thinking so much, making me dream all this weird stuff

You lay back down and close your eyes, praying that you will have a dreamless sleep this time.

The Next Morning

You rush out your room and into the kitchen you grab a bite to eat.

Dad- you’re going to be late on the first day of school

You- (grab a water bottle instead of the orange juice, remembering the dream) I still have time

Dad- (raises a muffin) well, take this

You- (scream) no! (your dad looks at you in confusion) ~calming down~ I mean, I’m on a diet (you look at your watch feeling stupid) got to go (begin heading out)

Dad- (shouts) good luck!

You- (back up) don’t say that, please don’t say that

Dad- (confused) are you okay?

You- (point towards the front door) no, I mean yea (smile) ok, I’m going to go now (you quickly walk to the front door and out. You go into your black Corolla and speed to school) You finally reach the parking lot, and manage to find a parking space.

You- (out loud) yes! I didn’t have to circle the parking lot like in my dream…woo (you exhale)

You reach over to the passenger side to get your things, but freeze when you see a black Altima park next to you.

You- (face forward) oh my God, oh my God (you hold on to the steering wheel)

You nervously look to the side and see Dru come out with his hair cut.

You- ****! (you let your head fall forward, but accidentally push hard on the horn)

You quickly sit back up and see Dru looking.

You- (to yourself) good going y/n

You decide to sit there until he left, but for some reason he wouldn’t. He was bending into his car, looking for something. You look at the time, and it was really time for you to go. Not wanting to be any later, you grab your things and get out. You quickly begin walking and put the alarm, already far from your car. You continue to walk in a hurry, but before going into the building, you look back and see Dru walking slowly walking your way. You quietly walk into class, while the teacher was busy trying to get organized. You see your friend Amber sitting down, but all the seats next to her were taken. You shrug and sit down in the only open seat. She turns back and mouths something to you. You didn’t have a clue what she was trying to say and blackly look at her. About 2 minutes later the guy in front of you hands you a note.

You open and Amber writes: Girl guess what!!?? Dru and Nikki broke up! (your eyes widened and you look at her, and she smiles while nodding her head. You continue to read) They broke up two weeks ago, but I’m not sure why, Omari says that Dru doesn’t say much about why. Anyway, aren’t you happy! You write back: I wouldn’t have expected that…damn I guess my prayers were answered, lol, nah j/p. I saw him this morning, he is looking so good. (you send the note)

After Class

You walk next to Amber to your next class, while telling her about your dream. As you walk into the science building, you see Dru leaning against the wall, with his backpack hanging over one arm and his varsity jacket. Omari, Jay, and another football player are around him. Omari look sees Amber, and stops talking.

Omari- (hugs her) hey baby (they kiss each other)

You just stand there (you were going to start walking straight down the hall).

Jay- (smiles) you not going to say hi

You- (coming back from your dazed) ~smile~ oh what’s up boy (you give him a big hug and he picks you up)

Jay- (messes with your hair) what you got?

You- (trying to keep your cool) Biology Ap

Jay- oh excuse me (Dru and the other guy laugh)

You- what do you have?

Jay- me and the boys (points) have the “normal” science (looks at them) we got like principles of science huh?

Guy- (laughs) you dumb Jay…I got Physics, I don’t bout you (he looks at you) I’m Mike (extends his hand)

You- (smile) I’m y/n (you shake his hand, then let go. You glance over at Dru, but quickly look away)

Jay- my bad…well you met Mike, and this is Dru

Dru- (stands up straight) I had for English last year right?

You- (shaking his hand) yea

Mike- aright well we out (he gives Jay dap, and waves by to you)

Dru- (does this handshake thing with Jay) I guess we’ll see today at practice (he looks at you) I’ll see you (he smiles and walks away)

Your heart melts and you keep looking as he walks away.

Jay- (snaps his finger in front of your face) damn…you whooped You- (look at him) ~laugh~ shut up (look at Amber) come on girl, we don’t want to be late to that class

Amber hugs Omari goodbye, then heads with you to class. Before walking into class, you see Nikki walking by in her cheerleading outfit. She always walked with such confidence, her hair so perfect, and her make-up so perfect, it was annoying.

After Practice

K- (rubbing her legs) I’m not going to be able to walk tomorrow

You- (tired) for real…my whole body hurts (look at her) but why you make up that little number of dropping to the floor…we did it over so many times, I swear I wouldn’t have been able to do another one

K- it’s only the first day and I’m already *****ing…this is not good

You- (laugh) you do that every year (pick up your bag) I’m going home now, I want to sleep so bad, good thing I only have a little bit of homework

K- (hugs you) holla

You walk out of the dance room and head out to the parking lot. You look to the side and see Dru standing with his gym bag. Nikki was in front of him, telling him something, while he just stood there and looked at her. His eyes looked so different, so gloomy. Nikki stops talking and walks away. Dru looks down at the floor and some seconds later begins walking. You continue to walk, and reach your car as Dru is putting in his things. You open the driver door and throw in your bag. You look at Dru and he gives you a half smile.

You- tired?

Dru- (lowly) something like that

You- (nod) ~not knowing what to do next, you just smile and get in, quickly driving away~


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post #9  quote:

WOW...DAT WAS'Z A DR3AM...I WAS'Z LAUGHiN WH3N SH3 WOK3 UP AND THiNGS'Z START3D HAPP3NiNG LiK3 TH3 DR3AM...LOL....BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP

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Talking post #10  quote:

BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP
BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP BUMP That was funny. Lol! She was having a dream.





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Cool Ah-mazing post #11  quote:

BUMP IT UP GIRL

what a dream!

great story hun

keep it going



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