| I don't like to dis other people's creativity, especially poetry. I recognize that it is very personal. However, I did not understand this poem. I read it numerous times. I get that the poet is sad and wants to get beyond it, but the poem never pulls me in. I can't relate. Gaboman is right. If you are going to use ebonics that is fine. That will help us to understand the background of the poem's subject. However, you still have to make the poem understandable to everybody who reads it. A truly good poem will transcend all cultures. Everyone should be able to relate to it. My suggestion is to not worry so much about it rhyming. As long as you have rhythm it will sound good. Instead, focus more on using powerful words. And proper punctuation will help the reader follow the rhythm. I hope this helps. Keep writing! | |
